Comments:
radiogurl - 2006-12-05 00:11:19
Going to have to take a while to digest that one (no pun intended.) It's definitely a few degrees away from center; well-written, as always, and ripe with nuanced commentary. I just need a while to reconstruct the puzzle in my mind.
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elgan - 2006-12-05 08:15:27
Good one, John. Well paced, very visual.
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muppet23 - 2006-12-05 09:15:10
Proletariat the horse... Is this an adult, laboring class version of Gumby or did the Valium win out?
And when are we headed to Ireland??
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Jonquill - 2006-12-05 15:52:43
Five times through, and I still find errors and sentences I'd re-write. Good god damn.
I'm not sure how much of this I should put up here, but I might end up putting the rest of the first chapter up once it reads legigibly...
Anyway, Ireland? Woman, call it. I'm there.
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muppet23 - 2006-12-07 18:31:31
You always have grammar mistakes... I mean, always. I ignore these things NOW, but I cringe when I see them...
How about January? Gifts of money for Christmas and my current unemployment make for some excellent Ireland conditions.
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muppet23 - 2006-12-07 18:34:19
Oh and, yes, put more up. I miss reading 'you,' you scrawny, cracked-voice New Yawker, you.
I think I need more 'yous.' You should really talk about ewes more often than you do, don't you think?
Finals. My head hurts.
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muppet23 - 2006-12-07 18:41:37
The red hippo flies high over the meadow.
Expounded in ellipsis.
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